Hello my readers, as you may know this is the final entry of
this blog and likewise of the semester, I have no words to express and thank
you for all your support in reading my compositions and blog entries, and
likewise to Miss Brendaly for all the support and knowledge that she gave us
throughout this learning process, I know it is not easy to review and rate so
many compositions, but if done with love and dedication to work, everything is
done in the best way.
In this semester we know that we learned a lot about English Composition II, from creating advertisements and magazines to creating cause and effect essays, and we also learned steps to create compositions such as: Narrowing, new pre-writing techniques, the outline, Draft which includes editing, revising and proofreading , words that help us to express our ideas clearly, etc. We also learn how to create a thesis statement for cause and effect essays.
The learning acquired was essential and important for our
future profession, I know that it will help us a lot for it, with this I
learned to express myself better for the people who read my compositions and it
also helped me to enlarge my knowledge with new vocabulary, the experience with
this subject was incredible and I have no words to express all that I learned
and we learned during this semester.
For this week we have to create an effect essay for our second evaluation of the third register, with the general topic: "Sport on people since a young age" And we make it more specific, for this evaluation we need to make our activity complete again, so here you have my final composition. I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed writing it.
FOCUS-ON-EFFECT ESSAY
1. Narrowing
General: Sport on people since a young age.
Specific: Why do people prefer soccer as a sport since a young age?
2. Prewriting technque
Clustering
- Improves cardiovascular health
- Reduce body fat
- Strengthens bones
- Popularity
- Better paid
- Support
- Helps to distract yourself
- Remove stress
3.Thesis
statement:
Most kids and young people choose this sport because
they derive immense benefits from playing soccer in regards to your physique
and fitness, it also in your emotional and mental well-being.
4 4. Outline:
Introduction
-Thesis statement
-Facts about soccer
-My opinion about soccer
Body
P1-
It benefits our body
-Improves cardiovascular health
-Reduce body fat
-Strengthens bones
P2- Because it
is better than any other sport
-Popularity
-Better paid
-Support.
P3- It benefit your
mood
-Helps to distract yourself
-Remove stress
-Builds self-confidence in those who practice it
Conclusion:
To sum up, soccer despite being a sport that benefits
the body and our state of mind, requires game strategies so it involves the
structuring of plays and other techniques required, in general I could say that
soccer is a very recognized sport worldwide and I recommend children and young
people to practice it.
3.5. Draft
(editing, revising and proofreading)
3.6 . Final
composition
Why do
people prefer soccer as a sport since a young age?
At what age can I start practicing soccer? Is often a
recurring question asked by young people. However, there are studies that
indicate that the best age to start practicing a sport is between 9 and 10
years old, since the child begins to acquire the necessary skills to practice
the sport. Therefore most kids and young people choose this sport
because they derive immense benefits from playing soccer in regards to their
physique and fitness, as well as your emotional and mental well-being. This
sport is one of the most popular and recognized all over the world by the
different teams known today, such as Real Madrid, Barcelona, Juventus, etc. Nowadays
soccer is chosen as the best sport ever for different reasons.
First of all, it benefits our body. Soccer is one of the best
sports that helps the body in different ways: helps to improve cardiovascular
health, one of the best exercises for the heart is running, which is why
soccer is on the list of sports that promote cardiovascular health. Also helps to
reduce body fat, because of the intense activities that are performed such as
running, jumping,etc. Bones are also strengthened by the
practice of soccer when performing some high intensity activities, therefore
our body also tends to gain shape. Personally I consider that this sport helps
and benefits our whole body in a great way.
Second, Because it is better than any other sport, every
fan and lover of soccer will confirm this point, since the passion that is
experienced in a soccer game does not compare with anything. Popularity, nowadays
soccer is becoming more famous because of the World Cup, where all the
countries fight to qualify and where the best soccer players from all over the
world participate, this makes young people decide to practice this sport at a
young age. Better paid, this is another thing that people see before
practicing a sport, as we know, sports in general are very well paid especially
soccer, we can see that the great soccer players like Cristiano Ronaldo or
Messi earn millions to practice this sport, and that is why many young people
choose to practice this sport. In addition, this sport has a lot of support
from many well-known brands that sponsor these teams and even carry out leagues
or world championships. I think soccer is one of the most influential sports
and undoubtedly one of the best in the world.
Last but not least, It benefits your mood.
Undoubtedly, soccer improves your overall mood and makes you feel better. It also helps to distract yourself, which is something that
everyone who practices this sport enjoys a lot and forgets everythings for that
moment. It removes stress, as well as depression and anxiety, this
sport helps in a great way because most of those who practice this sport tend
to carry a lot of stress, so they tend to eliminate these moods to exercise and
perform their practices. And builds self-confidence in those who practice it. This
sport can help improve self-confidence as well as team players, to achieve
personal and group goals and to better develop their skills, and it can also
help to increase self-esteem.
To sum up, soccer despite being a sport that benefits
the body and our state of mind, requires game strategies so it involves the
structuring of plays and other techniques required, in general I could say that
soccer is a very recognized sport worldwide and I recommend children and young
people to practice it.
For this week we have to create a cause essay for our first evaluation of the third register, with the general topic: "Why do people find ASMR (autonomic sensory meridian response) YouTube videos comforting?" And we make it more specific, the only difference for this activity is that we had to make our activity complete, that is with the following points:
1. Narrowing
2. Prewriting technique
3. Thesis statement
4. Outline
5. Draft (editing, revising and proofreading)
6. Final composition
So here is my final composition. I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed writing it
FOCUS-ON-CAUSES METHOD
1. Narrowing
General: "Why do people find ASMR (autonomic sensory meridian response) YouTube videos comforting?"
Specific: Why do people decide watching ASMR videos on Youtube?
2. Prewriting technique
Clustering
- Stimulates the body
- Facilitates meditation
- It helps to sleep
- Relieve stress
- People see it because is has anything to do
- Lack of interaction between people
3. Thesis statement:
Nowadays many people watch ASMR videos on Youtube for differents reasons,
amoung them we have: To relax, To avoid sleeplessness and Boredom.
4. Outline
Introduction:
-Thesis statement
-Facts about why people find ASMR videos relaxing
-My opinion about ASMR videos
Body
P1- To
relax
-Many people tend to feel stimulation in their body.
-It helps to have a better meditation facility.
P2- To
avoid sleeplessness
-IT helps to sleep.
-Helps to relieve stress.
P3- Lack of education or knowledge
-People see it because it has anything to do.
-Lack of interaction between people
Conclusion:
To sum up, this
type of video helps us a lot in different ways by its soft sounds, different
sounds with the mouth and whispers that can cause an effect of relaxation to
the body and so feel at the time of listening and also gives a false sense of
personal attention.
5. Draft (editing,
revising and proofreading)
6. Final
composition
Why do people decide watching ASMR videos on
Youtube?
Have you ever thought how to get rid of stress or get bored? Nowadays
many people have opted to watch videos on Youtube the famous ASMR, this type of
video has become popular for its great impact it has given today. According to
Cline a 2015 study shows a large number of men and women who watch these videos
for the following reasons 98% did it to relax, 82% with the idea of fighting
insomnia and another 82% also to get rid of stress. This time you can not only
watch videos on Youtube you can listen to music, watch makeup tutorials or kill
time as they say. This kind of videos are the ones you will find trending,
because they are gaining a lot of being widely liked due to the experiences you
can acquire when you watch or listen to them. Nowadays many people watch ARSM
videos on Youtube for different reasons, among them we have: To relax, To avoid
sleeplessness and Boredom.
Watching
videos on Youtube causes a good feeling in all people especially when they
watch or listen to ASMR videos, First of all they do it to relax, this is
something that you can always get to feel when listening to these types of
videos, relaxation is an essential part that our body needs on certain
occasions therefore, we choose to stimulate our body through visualization by
these trends as are the tingling that can be perceived around our body as in
the spine, our hands, etc. And it can also help us to have a better facility
for meditation, which gives us a sense of calm and inner peace and can also
help reduce negative emotions. Personally these types of videos help me to relax
a lot and, on the one hand, to concentrate better.
Second, to avoid sleeplessness, sleep problems can affect our daily
life by preventing us from sleeping at night, so many people seek various
options to fall asleep, and one of them are the ASMR videos, they can help us
sleep and thus avoid some diseases that can arise in our body over time by not
sleeping the right time. And it
also helps to relieve stress, listening to this kind of sounds can help in a
great way to reduce stress, therefore many opt for this kind of sounds or
images. In my case these videos help me
a lot when I can't sleep, sometimes I don't even feel when I fall asleep.
Last but
not least, boredom is something that many of us go through lately and it has a
lot to do with our mood, lack of distraction or not doing interesting things to
do, listen or watch, so we decide to watch videos like this one. People see it
because they have nothing to do such as: they don't go out anymore or do
activities that they used to do. Lack of interaction between people is also
another thing why people get bored and choose to watch videos on youtube.
To sum up, this
type of video help us a lot in different ways by its soft sounds, different
sounds with the mouth and whispers that can cause an effect of relaxation to
the body and so feel at the time of listening and also gives a false sense of
personal attention.
This week we talk about the organization that we must have when creating our outline, it is important that we always keep in mind that everything must have an order so that everything is understandable as best as possible, also add a new type of prewriting technique that is clustering that help us to have a better control of our ideas. And finally discuss about the transition and connectors commonly use in Cause-Effect Essays for example:
- As a consequence
- As a result
- In addition to, etc.
For this week, we will work with both method again, but in this case using clustering method, so here you have my Cause and effect essays.
FOCUS-ON-CAUSES METHOD
1. Narrowing:
General: The causes of animal mistreatment.
Specific: Common reason why people mistreatment and hit animals.
2. Prewriting technique
Clustering
3. Thesis statement:
Nowadays many people all over the world mistreat animals and hit them in
a way that takes advantage of them because they cannot defend themselves and
for different reasons: To pleasure or profit, Psychological problems and lack
of education or knowledge.
4. Outline
Introduction:
-Thesis statement
-My experience and opinion
-Other people’s experiences
Body
P1- To pleasure
or profit
-Some people only do it for money or because of
economic problems.
-Others do it for hobby or to see them suffer.
-Or just revenge.
P2- Psychological
problems
-Most of them do it because they feel anxiety or
stress disorder.
-Intimidates other people.
-For hatred that he keeps in his heart.
P3- Lack of education or knowledge
-Animals necessity.
-Lack of respect.
-Grow up in families or settings where violent
behaviors develop.
Conclusion:
People who mistreat animals in my opinion are the worst people in the
world, animals never seek to be mistreated, hated, on the contrary they give
their love to people regardless of their social conditions, and why they
instead of receiving love receive hate, beatings, etc.
FOCUS-ON-EFFECT METHOD
1. Narrowing:
General: The effects of technology in education
Specific: How technology help student´s learning process.
2. Prewriting technique
Clustering
3. Thesis statement:
There are positive effects of technology that nowadays help students in
their learning process and help them acquire new knowledge and skills.
4. Outline
-Thesis statement
-My experience in my learning process
Body
P1- Access to internet
-Student´s can find a big amount of information
in websites.
-Student´s can find articles, audio-books,
tutorials, videos etc, to help them up to increase their learning process.
P2- Innovation
-Currently student´s do not need a classroom, now
they have computers, cellphones etc, to live their classes.
-Technology provide students different methods
and techniques to develop their classes.
P3- Efficiency
-Online or digital communication.
-Homeworks, documents and files can be sent by
links, e-mail and they do not need Physical documents.
Conclusion:
Technology have a power impact in our learning process because help us to
improve our knowledge and have news tools such as computers and hand held
devices, and so have a better experience technology.
This week we start a new register, where we will learn many interesting topics that will help us to improve our compositions. In this time we learned new types of essays, the cause and effect essays and two new methods that we help us to create our outline. FOCUS-ON-CAUSES METHOD and FOCUS-ON-EFFECTS METHOD.
For this week, we will work with both methods. So here is my short part of my cause and effect essays.
FOCUS-ON-CAUSES
METHOD
1. Narrowing
Topic: The causes of divorce
Specific: Why do parents get divorced?
2. Prewriting technique
Brainstorming
- Infidelity and jealousy
- Lack of communication between them
- Constant fights
- Bad economy
- Crisis (lack of employment)
- Repressed emotions
- Sometimes they fall in love with other people
- Lack of compromise
- Incompatibility
3.
Thesis statement:
Nowadays many couples are getting
divorce for differents reasons, those include: Personal problems, Lack of love
between couple and Social factors.
4.
Outline
Introduction:
-Thesis statement
-Background, my opinion about divorce
-Why they do that?
Body
P1-
Personal problems.
-Infidelity and jealousy
-Lack of communication between them.
-Constant fights
P2-
Lack of love between couple.
-Repressed emotions
-Sometimes they fall in love with other
people
-Lack of compromiso
-Incompatibility
P3-
Social factors
-Bad economy
-Crisis (lack of employment)
Conclusion:
Our parents get divorce for
many reasons why sometimes we do not understand or do not know, but what we do
know is that they do it because they do no longer love each other or because there
is no longer that spark in them that motivated them in a moment to take that
step.
FOCUS-ON-EFFECTS
METHOD
1. Narrowing
Topic: Stress impact on health
Specific: How stress can affect your body health?
2. Prewriting technique
Brainstorming
- Sleep problems
- Headache
- Fatigue
- Muscle tension or pain
- Exercising less often
- Angry outbursts
- Drug or alcohol misuse
- Lack ofmotivation or focus
- Anxiety
- Sadness or depresion
3.
Thesis statement:
Most people are unaware of how stress
can bring them closer to death.
4.
Outline
Introduction:
-Thesis statement
-My opinion and experience about Stress
Body
P1-
How it affect your body.
-Most of them suffer of fatigue and have
some sleeping problems
-People must of the time suffer from
headache and muscle tension or pain
P2-
How it affect on your behaviour
-Exercising les often
-Angry outbursts
-Drug or alcohol misuse
P3-
How it affect your mood
-Lack of motivation or focus and or
depression in most of the people
-It cause anxiety
Conclusion:
As
we know Stress is a natural and mental reaction that we have all gone through
at some point in our life, but with help of some healthy techniques we can
manage the stress that we accumulate in a given time.
Today we had to take the English composition exam in which we were tested on topics we had studied before like the point by point essay and the subject by subject essay in which we have to choose one of them, using a technique to organize our ideas like venn diagram and chart. So here is my composition.
Outline:Point by
Point Essay
Fast
food or Home cooking, Which is the best?
Introduction:
Purpose: Which is the best?
Paragraph
n°1: PREPARATION
Point
1: Fast Food
-You don't have to worry about preparing
your food
Point
2: Home Cooking
-You
prepare your own food the way you want to prepare it
Paragraph
n°2:INGREDIENTS
Point
1: Fast Food
-Restaurants tend not to measure the
amount of spices when cooking.
Point
2: Home Cooking
-You
can control the ingredients when cooking and add any other ingredients of your
choice
Paragraph
n°3:PORTION
Point
1: Fast Food
-Restaurants already have the exact
measurements for serving the food
Point
2: Home Cooking
-You are free to eat as many portions as
you want.
Conclusion:
To sum up, both fast
food and home cooking are good
Fast food or Home cooking, Which is the
best?
Have you ever asked
what is better, eating fast food or preparing your own food? As we know food in
our daily life is fundamental for our health, that is why it is important that
we eat in the best way, that is why I would like to share with you some aspects
in what I consider important for you to observe that it is better to eat, the
fast food prepared by restaurants or prepare your own food to your liking.
First of all, Food preparation is essential for
many people, since the most important thing is that the food is safe to eat. In
the case of fast food you don't have to worry about preparing your food,
because the restaurants prepare your food and the food you have chosen to eat.
Regarding the home cooking you prepare your own food the way you want
to prepare it and make it the way you want for example if you want to add
vegetables etc. So my recommendation is that you prepare your own food because
it is better and cheaper.
Second, Ingredients
are very important in our meals as they are the ones that give the flavor to
the food. In fast food, restaurants tend not to measure the amount of spices
when cooking, so sometimes the meals are too salty or lack salt, in other cases
they need other species of condiments. On the other hand in the home
cooking you can control the ingredients when cooking and add any other
ingredient of your choice and in the same way when cooking your food you can
add or even remove if you decide to do so. Also here in this case is better
home cooking
Last but not least, the Portion is something that everyone takes into
account and looks for when eating their food. In fast food, restaurants already
have the exact measurements for serving the food, so in most cases there are
people who do not fill up and stay hungry, however there are people who do not
mind asking for something extra in their meal like desserts or something like
satiating their hunger.Regarding home cooking you are free to eat as
many portions as you want and you have no limit to serve you the portions of
food you have prepared, but they take care that you do not exaggerate so much
in the portions and thus avoid stomach pains among others. For me it is better
to eat your own food to enjoy the portions you want.
To sum up, both fast food
and home cooking are good, but there are differences in which one is better
than the other, such as portions, ingredients etc, so tell me which do you
prefer, fast food or home cooking?
This week we need to created a Compare and Contrast Essay, Point by Point OUTLINE, I decided to write about Smartwatch or Traditional watch, which is better for you? because I think that this product everyone use every day, so I worked with a Venn Diagram. I hope you enjoy my entry!
Outline:Point by Point
Essay
Smartwatch or Traditional watch, which is better for you?
Introduction:
Purpose: Which is better for you?
Paragraph
n°1: Price
Point
1: Smartwatch
-Tend to
be more expensive
Point
2: Traditional watch
-Are more accessible to buy
Paragraph
n°2: Design
Point
1: Smartwatch
-Come with big screens, made of rubber
Point
2: Traditional watch
- Only show
us the time, made of leather
Paragraph
n°3: Battery life
Point
1: Smartwatch
-Fast charge
Point
2: Traditional watch
-A single charge
Conclusion:
Both
have the same function that show the time and date
Smartwatch or Traditional watch, which is better
for you?
Seeing the time or the date is something that everyone does every day at all hours of the day, while walking,waiting for someone and even eating, but have you ever asked yourself what is the best option or the best watch to see the time? Currently technology is evolving faster than we imagine and every time many accessories for daily use are going on sale that help us to make everything easier and more practical, such as the smartwatch. So now I would like to share with you some aspects that
we must take into account between Smartwatches and Traditional watches.
First of all, Price is something that everyone looks at before
buying an article, because sometimes some products tend to be a lot of
expensive but others tend to be less expensive or sometimes depending of the
material of the production, but in this case smartwatch tend to be more
expensive because they have some functions and features that makes them more
expensive to produce, for example they have GPS, touchscreen, etc. On the other
hand traditional watches are more accessible to buy because they tend to be
less expensive, so that means making it easier to own.
Design is something that catches everyone’s attention; the first
impression of a product leads people to acquire it regardless of its cost,
brand, etc. Smartwatch come with big screens, which help to see the time better, some are usually made of rubber, which for some people these designs do not stick to them since they do not like products of that material, but in general they are easier to use and help in
various activities such as counting steps, performing calculations, among others. But in the case of the traditional watches they only show us the time, and most of them usually have clock hands and are usually made of leather.
Battery life is essential for a watch, because without a battery
it cannot perform its time telling function. Smartwatch tends to fast charge just like a smartphone and its charge usually lasts about a full day or depending on its use, compared to traditional watches the battery is a single charge usually lasts around 2 or 3 years, so there is no need to worry in case one day the time will stop or if it is
correct.
To sum up, both have the same function that shows the time and
date; the moment to choose one, depends on the person and what suits them best,
but which watch is the best, the smartwatch or the traditional watch?
